My poem is about water. It talks about how it helps us and is all around us. In the end it also talks about how we are affecting it. The visuals show water and nature. It also helps visually show what i'm talking about.
It may not seem like it but the effects really helped my visual story. I used the effects to make my film clearer and vibrant. I used the color tool in many shots to make it more colorful. I think without the effects my film wouldn't of looked as good as it dose.
I think that I did a good job on the poem. I was surprised that I was able to make a poem like that. One thing that I could of done better was add more B-roll. I also could of re-filmed the the voiceover. Another thingI could of done was make my poem longer.
Nice b-roll!
ReplyDeleteNext time show pollution maybe, all that I saw was a muddy river.
Great job!!
Nice steady shots. A little shake in the camera on one b-roll. Nice clear voice over
ReplyDeleteGreat B-Roll.
ReplyDeleteYour audio wasn't very good.
Good effects.
Great b-roll and there was no camera movement (your welcome) Some of the text layovers were hard to read so I think you should've changed the color of the text. Overall great poem.
ReplyDeleteAwesome poem, I like the dramatic mood. At the end of a few of your lines a heard a sound, like air being blown onto a mic... maybe you could fix that somehow. Great B-roll shots and I love how you ended your poem!
ReplyDeleteThere were nice clear shots of B-Roll.
ReplyDeleteThe audio had some bumps in it and you couldve used some more expression in your voice.
There were good shots and a good message to your poem.
I really liked how your b-roll and pictures matched what you were saying in your poem.
ReplyDeleteI think it would make the poem even more meaningful if you added some background music.
Your voiceover was very clear and understandable.
Your poem really made me think about the essence of water and the importance of it.
ReplyDeleteYour voice was a bit expressionless
You really took the time to get relevant B-Roll
LOVE THAT PIG MACEO! Great work on your visual poem! I really loved those B-Roll shots because it's stunning and has interesting camera angles. One thing I suggest is to change the color of the text because on some parts of your video, it was really hard to read. However, your voice was very loud and clear. It clearly made up for those text effects and at one point, I don't really think you needed them!
ReplyDeleteKeep up the great work Maceo!
You had nice visuals to match your poem. You could have had more interesting shots. Your voiceover was easy to understand.
ReplyDeleteVery great job filming B-Roll, and the way you added text layovers tied it in even more (such as the shot with taro). One thing I would suggest is adding a bit more emotion in your voice while speaking. Nice idea, and your finished product was really great, especially the ending that brought it all back.
ReplyDeleteHi Maceo, nice poem, I really liked how you had very stable shots. One thing that you could change is lowering your volume. And another thing I liked was how it sounded like you were using emotion.
ReplyDeleteNice job Maceo! The B-Roll you've taken was excellent! It relates to what you're saying.
ReplyDeleteSome of the text were a little hard to see, possibly change the color of the texts?
But your poem was read very clearly!
Great Job!
I liked how there were words showing us what you said.
ReplyDeleteYou could have read with more enthusiasm in your voice...I got a little bored because of that
I liked how every sentence was short, there was a nice flow
I love your text layover! Maybe turn down your audio and put some music in. I love how its about everyone and relates to everyone. simple and sweet I love it!
ReplyDeleteI liked how you used text layovers to get your point across. I think that you could've filmed more b-roll and got longer shots. I think that you had good audio levels so it was easy to understand.
ReplyDeleteI liked the message that your poem was putting across
ReplyDeleteat the end it kinda sounded like air blowing in a mic but it wasnt too bad
good job!
Ending with a question was great.
ReplyDeleteMusic could be a nice touch to the poem, could set a mood of some sort.
Over all, the poem was pretty good.
Your voiceovers were really easy to understand. I think you could add more meaning to the poem. The visuals matched really well
ReplyDelete1.) I really liked the time lapse in the begging and the meaning to your story!
ReplyDelete2.) After you were done speaking for some of the lines, there was a quick sound. (Maybe wind?)
3.) You did a great job; the b-roll matched what you were saying really well and I liked how you included text layovers on all of your b-roll!
- Nice audio levels
ReplyDelete- You could've used b-roll that you didn't already use in another video
- Great text layovers
Good Idea about pollution and I liked how you finished it of with " But Why " thats a pretty good cliffhanger. Maybe turn down your voice over volume and add music. This story I think is a pretty good one and I like your shots especially the dirty water
ReplyDeleteYour voiceover was clear and easy to follow. You could have used shots that matched your poem more. The text layovers went well with your poem.
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